This TVLP competition ran in April 2021 to celebrate the writing abilities of students in years 7, 8 and 9 across our schools.
Thanks to the support and assistance of our wonderful English departments, we had 47 pupil entries from five of our schools: Beechwood School, Eton College, The Langley Academy, St Mary’s School Ascot, and The Windsor Boys’ School.
Our judge, Catherine Smith, (who gives some useful writing advice at the bottom of this page) had the challenging task of choosing a winner.
WINNER - 1ST PLACE:
LEAVE MY HAIR
by Caspar Whitwam, Eton College.
You make me wear white
You make me wear black
You take my phone
To help me sleep at night
I ask – it’s not an attack:
Leave my hair alone.
Falling like a curtain
It is my defence
Curling at my collar
Locks make me certain.
Our judge’s comments:
2ND PLACE:
THE DANCER
by Sienna Roos, St Mary’s School Ascot.
The lights go out. The spotlight is on me
As the music turns on I feel alive and free.
I flow to the lyrics with beauty and grace
Performing the choreography at a slow constant pace.
Then the music goes up to a faster speed
I feel like the music is all I really need.
I try to ignore the hundreds of faces;
Focused on my travel to different spaces.
Our judge’s comments:
3RD PLACE:
BE YOURSELF
by Firdows Ahmadi, Beechwood School.
Be yourself, no need to change yourself to become someone else.
Be normal, do things your own way.
Be brilliant, think highly of yourself.
Be creative, have a big imagination.
Be confident, dream big.
Be proud of who you are.
Be caring and sharing, help people around you.
Be honest, no need to lie.
Our judge’s comments:
RUNNER UP 'COMMENDED' ENTRIES:
Listed below in no particular order.
FOOTBALL, MY LIFE
by Daniel Groves, The Windsor Boys’ School.
DOWN BY THE VALLEY
by Leonora Jungels-Winkler, St Mary’s School Ascot.
THIS IS ME!
by Ayanah Smith, The Langley Academy.
THE VOICE
by Alex Duguid, Eton College.
WHAT IS LOVE?
by Aine Pickford, St Mary’s School Ascot.
DREAMS
by Bryan Ho, Eton College.
SWIRLS OF PAINT
by Chloe Flower, St Mary’s School Ascot.
DISABILITY
by Hector Dennis, Eton College.
EXPRESS YOURSELF TO ME
by Ellis Lehane, The Windsor Boys’ School.
OUR COMPETITION JUDGE:
We would like to thank our judge, Catherine Smith, who volunteered her time to read through all the great entries. Her assistance and expertise is greatly appreciated.
“Thanks and admiration to everyone who entered – writing isn’t easy, it’s always a risk, and no one should feel they are any ‘less of a writer’ if their poem wasn’t chosen on this occasion. Simon Armitage tells a wonderful story of how his primary school teacher didn’t choose a poem he wrote when he was 11 to feature in a display. He’s now the Poet Laureate.”
“I was struck by how many entries were rhymed. Rhyme can be great, and unify your poem in terms of sound patterns, but also consider if you really need to make all (or any) of your lines end-rhyme; maybe you don’t need it – non-rhyming poetry can be very powerful, too. The best way to develop your poetry is to read lots, and write lots.”
“And when you write – read each draft out loud – you’ll hear the rhythm, but also the ‘clunks’ – the words that don’t feel/sound right, the line breaks that aren’t in the best place. If you can, ask someone else to read your poem aloud to you; you’ll hear it in a different way, and that can be really useful.”
“Thanks again to all the students who entered the competition. Everyone who wrote a poem should be proud of themselves.”